WALT persuade other students to agree with our opinion. This the purpose for my writing.
Success Criteria:
- I plan for a writing task
- I write a variety of sentence lengths with different persuasive language sentence starters
- Give reasons with detail - use specific words
- I write most topic and high frequency words correctly.
- I use capital letters, fullstops, question marks and exclamation marks correctly.
- Use persuasive language
We should not have fairs at school.
In my opinion I think that no school should allow fairs.
One of the reasons we should not have fairs is that someone was in the line to get some food and then he goes over to talk to his friend and then another guy pops in to the other guy's place and then the guy goes back to his place and then the guys get into a fight
My second point is a lot of fairs have bouncy castles and lots of little kids that are under the ages of 4 like going on them but all of the big kids jump too high and knock the little kids off. This is why it is so dangerous.
Another point is some fair’s start at 10:00 and then when it is night time and it is 11:00 people who live across the street can not get any sleep and they are awake all night and in the morning they are soooo tired
Therefore I strongly believe that we should not have fairs at school
Good girl for you using strong persuasive language sentence starters. Next time - try and use more detail to back up your main points.
ReplyDeleteI do like fairs. But if This happens it just won't do :)
ReplyDeleteyep it is so dangerous i agree it just wont do :) :)
DeleteI think you done a wonderful job explaining why there should't be fairs at school. Faery Awesome job Tayla xo :)
ReplyDeletelovely work Tayla and great points. Like how you are thinking of others that may live close to the fair.x
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